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The giant fan whirred furiously. He pulled on the flying jacket, placed the goggles onto his head, and gripped the cardboard box for dear life. This was to be another of his incredible adventures, and he couldn’t wait to find out where it would take him…
“Yeah this is amazing.” shouted Luca. “I wonder where I’m going?” “Let’s get out of here.” In another world. “I wonder where I am.” wondered Luca. “Wait what’s that down there.” “IT’S A DRAGON!!!” “I’ve always wanted to keep a dragon.” “I’ll go see what type it is.” Then when he got closer the dragon let out a Roar and that scared Luca off. “Well I won’t get that type of dragon.” Then rain started pouring down hard on his head. “The rain are stones.” shouted Luca. “I’ll go find a cave.” After searching and searching for a nice warm cave. “Finally I found one.” He walked in and made himself comfy. Then he heard a grunt. It was a baby dragon, and it was a Galaxy dragon. It was so cute. Then he walked up to the little dragon and scratched behind her ear. She liked Luca very much. Then they went home and we were two peas in a pod. He named her Moon. Then she was an adult and she had cute babies. They were a big happy family.
Hello Carys,
ReplyDeleteYour story has a lot of really good metaphors.
Next time you could describe Luca a bit more like maybe his age or his hair colour?
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